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Jasmine year 5/6 camp writing

WALT: write in paragraphs

In week 5 we went on year 5 and 6 camp so what we do at camp is we sleep in tents and we get to do activities and other stuff. What we get to do is wet activities like killer zone .we get to be in groups for tents and for the group dance concert.At camp we did a lot of activities and fun stuff the year ⅚ went on camp at school.

We went on camp because it has being going for 28 years but now is 29 years.My favourite part of camp is that we got to do killer zone with Tamaiti Lelei it was fun because you got wet and you had to use teamwork .Mr Jacobson set this game for us.My favourite other thing is  tenting because we got to decorate our tent.

First me and Mele got our big bag and put it in our  tent then took off our shoe and started to decorate.I just want to say thank you to Norah-jade and siosiua for being good leaders and thank you to Miss Timmy for cooking the food and to all the parent helpers.I have learnt to just try stuff that you don't and haven't played.

Task description: we had to write about what we did at camp.